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100wc#4 Poppy

Filed under: Uncategorized — poppyc at 3:26 pm on Friday, October 5, 2012

Once a upon a time there lived a glorious, glistened, gloomy  WEEE man who  went to find dinner all a lone in the misty wood. The next day he went to find a friend to play with every day but he was to scared because when his Mum was small she went    to find a friend she got grabbed and that is why he dose not want to do it but he was so brave and he went in there . He went to school but he did not want to because he thort that the other’s  WEEE men might make fun of him because he’s made of out of plastic



   siobhan miller

08/10/2012 @ 11:00   Reply

Hi poppy it siobhan from the 100WC team
really great way to uses alliteration to describe the ”weee man” really imaginative story 🙂 keep up the good work.
from siobhan


   Jenna (Team 100WC)

07/10/2012 @ 16:34   Reply

Poppy, what a lovely story, with a lot of detail.
As mentioned with the comment above, some improvement with spelling and using grammar is needed, however I like the content.
Well done Poppy 🙂



06/10/2012 @ 13:15   Reply

Well done Poppy! Anna is right, great use of alliteration 🙂



05/10/2012 @ 19:01   Reply

Well Done Poppy,
I love your story, the idea is great, maybe next time you could use some speech, I like the way you used alliteration and wow words when you said ‘glorious, glistening, gloomy’ they are such great words in such a great story. you have missed out a bit of punctuation ate the end of sentences and commas. I like the opening ‘Once upon a time’ yet there is an extra a in between Once and Upon.
Well done!
from Anna

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