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100wc#4 by Louis

Filed under: Uncategorized — louisr at 3:31 pm on Friday, October 5, 2012

Sparky’s electrical Bones.

Sparky is a vishors and nice terradactle and is only 18 months old. It was coming to the end of the world when he fownd a glowing blue stone. So because he is young he ate it!

The next day as the sun was rising Sparky shouted ”space rociet “.

Then his mum said “meteor” all the dinos ran all the sea monsters swam to the bottom of the ocean and every single teradactor died but except from Sparky. “It was the stone” said Sparky. Even though Sparky was getting hit by meteors. He was still standing but he fell and was still alive. When the humans dug him up they put him in museum straight away. that night he ran out the museum and lived forever.




09/10/2012 @ 12:09   Reply

This is a good story Louis but next time use more puncuation



06/10/2012 @ 15:52   Reply

Mrs Halford Team 100WC
Hello Louis, this is a very imaginative story for the 100WC. The picture does look a bit like a dinosaur doesn’t it.
It would be very exciting if there was a dinosaur still alive. Thank you for writing this for the challenge. Keep on writing 🙂


   Jenna (Team 100WC)

05/10/2012 @ 20:34   Reply

Louis, what an amazing story, a lot of detail and a dinosaur with an excellent name. Louis, just be careful of your spelling “fownd” should be “found” and there are a few other mistakes, so if you are having trouble maybe use a dictionary, and do a little work on grammar.
I think this is one of the best stories that I’ve read, you have really used your imagination,
so well done, I hope I don’t bump into Sparky one day considering he’s still alive.
Well done Louis, super work 🙂

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