Horse Chestnut Tree Class

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100 wc by Sam

Filed under: Uncategorized — samf at 1:02 pm on Monday, October 15, 2012
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‘Mum can we go please can we go?’ Asked Travis. ‘Yes dear’. Said mum. ‘Where are we going again?’ Asked dad. ‘I’ve already told you about one million times the zoo!’Mum shouted. ‘Oh well sorry i did think it was a place where they kept animals.’ Said Dad. ‘Yes Travis really wants to see the bunnies.’ Said mum. ‘Ok’. Said dad. It was only a five minute drive. When they got there they went inside and it was Easter, then they saw something strange very strange indeed. It was fascinating and phenomenal the temperature dropped suddenly and the egg hatched. The bunny went berserk, was this the end…



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   Chloe

23/10/2012 @ 19:07   Reply

Hi Sam, I’m Chloe from Lyons Hall Academy. Your 100 word challenge is excellent! I love the bit where you said: it was fascinating and phenomenal the temperature dropped suddenly and the egg hatched. The bunny went berserk, was this the end… Also, lovely spelling with ‘phenomenal’ and ‘berserk’ they are great words to use! Keep the fantastic work up with your writing. I think you’ll become far when you’re older with writing too!

Chloe :)

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   mrsgurney

20/10/2012 @ 18:28   Reply

I really like your story Sam! :-) What a cliff hanger at the end! I wonder what happens next?
Mrs Gurney

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   Dawn Felton

19/10/2012 @ 20:00   Reply

I loved this Sam, and it is great fun to read through all the work which you and your classmates have done.

Keep it up!!

Dawn Felton (Sam’s proud Mum!)

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   Nicole 100w-team

18/10/2012 @ 07:39   Reply

I really enjoyed reading your story, i love the very end!
‘was this the end?’
it leaves me wondering what happens next.
i love your use of speech!
can’t wait to read some more of your work!

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   Diethild Starkmeth Team - 100WC

16/10/2012 @ 15:18   Reply

A great story, Sam!
Your dialogues make it very lively and interesting to read. I love the ending, because now I can imagine what happened next 
Keep up the great work, Sam!
Kind regards,
Diethild

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   zainm

15/10/2012 @ 20:08   Reply

Hello Sam,

I like your speech when Trivs and his and his mum were having a conversation,next time be careful when you are I’s when you put oh well sorry i did think it was.

form your friend zain (6d2012.highlawnprimary.net)

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   aprilb

15/10/2012 @ 19:52   Reply

wow Sam that was intresting and was that really the end it is a mistoriy i would really like you to write some more of that.

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